00:00 - I like the effort you have gone into with the opening titles. A sound effect (a little like that used on the "24" credits) might improve. A couple of your masks (for example, the one over the "s") are slightly off, but it's still an impressive piece of effects work for Premiere
00:13 - I'm not so sure about the flashing credits here. I would be tempted to fade these in. Generally, the credits would be slightly more formalised in terms of timing and positioning
00:17 - When it comes to doing your final project, one thing you should research is the conventions of how credits work (not important for this piece, I should say, but worth looking at - you'd be amazed at how often people get these wrong...!)
00:25 - some good framing in these initial shots, although the focus thing doesn't work so well; make sure you are a little more scrupulous about this next time (if you're not certain, shoot several versions of the same shot at slightly different focal lengths. Alternatively, take a tablet/ laptop with an SD card slot with you so you can check footage on a bigger screen)
A note on the sound - the camera picks up a lot of ambient hiss and hum, including any knocks on the the tripod (or even slight movements of the camera). You should be aware of this and should factor it into your planning.
00:28 - continuity here is good - an effective action match/ shot-reverse - well done!
00:33 - there is a slight lack of audio continuity here (we can hear Rob's footsteps in the previous shot; they cut out when we cut to Callum). Kudos for the constumes, by the way
00:37 - good close-up, but the focus is again slightly out - something to check in the future
00:38 - the angles you've shot Rob and Calum at are slightly odd, if we're to assume they are looking at each other. You could really do with a VLS which establishes their geographical location respective to each other. Again, Rob is slightly out of focus (you've got the kitchen window in focus, so it's a little deeper than you need).
00:44 - I like this over the shoulder shot - effective. Again, watch the focus
00:55 - You're using a range of shots and angles, which is excellent. You're also adhering to rules of continuity, which demonstrates a very good understanding of the flow of visual narrative. You might want to think a little about the audio (a weakness with the cameras more than your film-making skills)
01:08 - That said, I think you hold the shot on Calum ("Information... Information") for too long; I would have used two or three edits here, to break it up for impact (I might also have included an action matched shot of the wine glass being put down). The edit here, where Callum slightly dips out of frame, is the weakest in the piece - you need to watch this.
01:10 - You've positioned the camera on the wrong side here. If you look at the previous shot, Rob is looking from left to right. Now he's looking from right to left. This is called the 180 degree rule. That said, it's a very well-framed shot. Again, watch the focus.
01:14 - A decent CU, although I would have framed it as a high-angle shot, since it seems to be more from Calum's perspective. Again, focus is an issue here.
01:16 - considering the previous shot, this is not so well framed. I would have done this as a low angle, from Rob's pov. You've kind of done this a couple of shots later - I like the very low angle you've used here.
The fade at the end is a little swift.
Overall, I'm very impressed with this. You've had a go at using a different camera and I'm confident that with a little more experimentation, you'll be able to get reasonable effects out of it. You've used a range of shots, most of them successfully. Your editing is very tight - I detected very few issues here. Your continuity is effective and again there were only a few issues. Nit-picking aside, I think you have done a very impressive job here, particularly considering it was a solo project - well done!
00:00 - I like the effort you have gone into with the opening titles. A sound effect (a little like that used on the "24" credits) might improve. A couple of your masks (for example, the one over the "s") are slightly off, but it's still an impressive piece of effects work for Premiere
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00:17 - When it comes to doing your final project, one thing you should research is the conventions of how credits work (not important for this piece, I should say, but worth looking at - you'd be amazed at how often people get these wrong...!)
00:25 - some good framing in these initial shots, although the focus thing doesn't work so well; make sure you are a little more scrupulous about this next time (if you're not certain, shoot several versions of the same shot at slightly different focal lengths. Alternatively, take a tablet/ laptop with an SD card slot with you so you can check footage on a bigger screen)
A note on the sound - the camera picks up a lot of ambient hiss and hum, including any knocks on the the tripod (or even slight movements of the camera). You should be aware of this and should factor it into your planning.
00:28 - continuity here is good - an effective action match/ shot-reverse - well done!
00:33 - there is a slight lack of audio continuity here (we can hear Rob's footsteps in the previous shot; they cut out when we cut to Callum). Kudos for the constumes, by the way
00:37 - good close-up, but the focus is again slightly out - something to check in the future
00:38 - the angles you've shot Rob and Calum at are slightly odd, if we're to assume they are looking at each other. You could really do with a VLS which establishes their geographical location respective to each other. Again, Rob is slightly out of focus (you've got the kitchen window in focus, so it's a little deeper than you need).
00:44 - I like this over the shoulder shot - effective. Again, watch the focus
00:55 - You're using a range of shots and angles, which is excellent. You're also adhering to rules of continuity, which demonstrates a very good understanding of the flow of visual narrative. You might want to think a little about the audio (a weakness with the cameras more than your film-making skills)
01:08 - That said, I think you hold the shot on Calum ("Information... Information") for too long; I would have used two or three edits here, to break it up for impact (I might also have included an action matched shot of the wine glass being put down). The edit here, where Callum slightly dips out of frame, is the weakest in the piece - you need to watch this.
01:10 - You've positioned the camera on the wrong side here. If you look at the previous shot, Rob is looking from left to right. Now he's looking from right to left. This is called the 180 degree rule. That said, it's a very well-framed shot. Again, watch the focus.
01:14 - A decent CU, although I would have framed it as a high-angle shot, since it seems to be more from Calum's perspective. Again, focus is an issue here.
01:16 - considering the previous shot, this is not so well framed. I would have done this as a low angle, from Rob's pov. You've kind of done this a couple of shots later - I like the very low angle you've used here.
The fade at the end is a little swift.
Overall, I'm very impressed with this. You've had a go at using a different camera and I'm confident that with a little more experimentation, you'll be able to get reasonable effects out of it. You've used a range of shots, most of them successfully. Your editing is very tight - I detected very few issues here. Your continuity is effective and again there were only a few issues. Nit-picking aside, I think you have done a very impressive job here, particularly considering it was a solo project - well done!